Cold And Broken Halleluja

After reading the Twighlight series by Stephenie Meyer, I've been wanting to write something about vampires. It's short, I know, but please critique this! It would help me alot. - ...

I think it flowed nicely. And, though it was simple, it was perfect in its simplicity. Well done!

Wow. Just, wow. The imagery was amazing, and there was a lot of depth to this poem. Good job! I loved the part about the canvas. Very poetic :wink:

It may be best to read one at a time... but oh well. I'm reading Pirate Curse by Kai Meyer, Titans of Chaos by John C. Wright, and New Moon ...

I agree with Sokool. Perhaps you should try introducing the characters gradually, instead of referring to them by their name when they first speak. You had a lot of description, ...

Go Star Wars! 0.o Well, now that that is out of my system: Welcome to the YMS! I really can't wait to read some of your work. Historical fiction and ...

Black umbrellas... not something most people would normally write about, but you pulled this off wonderfully. I thought it flowed nicely and had a lot of deep meaning to it. ...

Wow, great imagery! That was really great -and it did flow very nicely :D

I thought these books were great. In fact, I just did a book review on them for my English class. I do agree that they are pretty confusing, especially for ...

Do I smell like a Leonard Cohen fan? Maybe I need a shower... XD Honestly, I have never heard of Leonard Cohen. I do know that a lot of people ...

How long have you been writing? I love reading poetry, but I just can't seem to write any that's not utter garbage, lol. For your stargazing, do you use a ...

Hey, I'm Jessy, but you can call me Halleluja for short or something like that. I live in Florida... land of... strange people... :shock: You won't catch me saying y'all ...